pitch

(needs a context)

a voice singing

(lacking detail)

the angle of a ship in a storm

(a sudden shift in subject)

also the sealant keeping the ship watertight

(associative leap? note the lines getting longer)

plumb

(musically interesting. slightly comical. return to monosyllable)

peter

( )

featherweight assailant

(recycling related sounds)

the mast snaps

(return to previous subject matter. provocation. still no punctuation.)

(getting distracted by outside activity)

(drifting in thought to subjects already mined ad nauseum. avoidance)

pee-hole

(childish, pseudo-shocking humor)

fellows. gallows. newsprint. counterweight. clouds. possum.

(variation in punctuation. list. “possum” personal code for “possibile,” or “possibility”. a cowardliness.)

flinching.

(like the lion)

a change in tactics.

(wanting to plunge in. not wanting to seem self-indulgent)

pock-marked.

(a golf ball)

,hard as

(combine)

the noun.

(as in)

the farming implement

(giant bales of hay strewn over a clipped field. whizzing by the car windows.)

japan

(as in)

not something exotic. a place with sheep and farms. just like wisconsin.

(revealing biographical information.positing an imaginary socio-cultural stance. trying to appear culturally sensitive and educated.)

(losing concentration. distracted by music)

the smell of dryer sheets and cat piss from the open door

(as in)

the end of the poem